A Classmate Who Has Influenced Me in College

審題思路

本篇題目一改過去常寫的議論文，要求寫對自己影響最大的大學同學。根據題目要求，寫作重點應當是描述，而不是議論。考生首先應直接或間接引出主題，然后通過具體事例闡釋該同學對“我”產生重大影響的原因，最后發表議論，照應前文，升華主題。由此可知，題目要求寫一遍夾敘夾議，以敘述為主的作文。

寫作提綱

引出主題；同學“Tom”改變了“我”(be subject to being pessimistic,strive to encourage,appreciate)

闡釋主題：1在他的幫助下，我發現英語沒那么難（be confused about,make progress）2.他教我如何面對挫折（live through setbacks）

升華主題：1“Tom”讓我認識到了自信和樂觀的重要性（the significance of self-confidence and optimism）。2.這種態度使人受益終身（benefit people all his life）

#范文

A Classmate Who Has Influenced Me in College

Once upon a time,I was not so confident about my study and was subject tobeing pessimistic when confronted with frustrations.However,I found myself gradually changing as Tom,one of my classmate in college ,strived to encourage me( 通過描述那個曾經缺乏自信的我，漸漸有所改變引出主題-----對我影響最大的同學，他竭盡全力鼓勵我)。 I really appreciate his help. (承接上句，表達對他的感激之情)。

翻譯：我曾經對自己的學習并不那么自信，而且遇到挫折就容易悲觀。然而，當我的一個大學同學湯姆竭盡全力鼓勵我的時候，我發現自己漸漸有所改變。我非常感激他的幫助。

I used not to be good English ; however,whenever I was confused aboutthe teacher’sexplanation,he always interpreted it to me in an explicit way Gradully, I found English not so difficult and made progress day by day。（列舉具體事例，在英語學習方面對我的幫助）。

In addition, it was Tom who kept guiding me how to live through all kinds of setbacks in life.(使用in addition銜接，使語意連貫，而且層次分明)。（1） I’ll never forget the very day when I failure my speech contest and I was overwhelmed and ashamed.（2） Tom told me that nobody can defeat a person if he is determined to stand up to every failure. (1、2列舉具體事例，演講比賽失敗后他對我的的鼓勵)。 8With his encouragement, I regained confidence,realizing that optimism was always the key to success.(說明他對我的影響,在他的鼓勵下,我重拾信心,認識到樂觀的重要性.)

翻譯:以前我英語不好,然而每當我對老師的講解感到困惑不解時,湯姆總是用清晰明了的方式給我解釋.漸漸的我發現英語并沒有那么難,并一天天的取得進步.不僅如此,湯姆還一直引導我如何應對生活中各種各樣的挫折.我永遠也忘不了我演講比賽失敗那一天,我當時不知所措,覺得很羞愧.湯姆告訴我,沒有誰能打敗一個在每一次失敗面前都堅定的站起來的人.在他的鼓勵下,我重拾信心,認識到樂觀常常是成功的關鍵.

Thanks to Tom , I eventually learnedthesignificanceof self-confidence and optimism. They not only serve as indispensable characteristicsofpersonality butalso will benefit people all his life(升華主題：他使我認識到自信和樂觀的重要性。使我終身受益)

翻譯：多虧湯姆，我最終認識到自信和樂觀的重要信。它們不僅是人們必備的品格，而且還使人終身受益。）

 

詞匯

 

Be subject to 有…傾向

 

friendship 友誼

 

Appreciate 感激

 

intimate親密的

 

Interpret解釋

 

gap差距

 

Indispensable 不可或缺的

 

be grateful to 對…感激的

 

Optimistic樂觀的pessimistic悲觀的

 

Easygoing隨和的helpful有幫助的

 

Accommodating肯通融的隨和的

 

Character 性格